免费托福写作批改：博物馆可以了解一个国家

Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.

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Museums have existed all over the world to date. Almost everyone has experience occurring a museum fulfill of masterpieces and wallowing in it. Frankly, as well as travel agencies, people always consider visiting museums as a most efficiency way to gasp all about a country.I, however, hold an opinion there are better ways to be accepted by a region.

Food is totally a weapon of mass destruction to look through a country. On the one hand, it is no doubt that people will chase for delicious eating in an unfamiliar country. France, which is famous for the red wine, has attracted a large amount of tourists seeking for the origin there. As well as the museum, or even better, red wine take people to recognize the special culture in France. On the other hand,eating could lead people to retrieve long history. In Japan, nearly every sushi shop hangs pictures on wall showing to customers. Walk into, sit down and look around, you’ll absolutely attracted by the history story about food revealing from those pictures. Japanese short but complex history will bring you into its unique history uncouciously and let you understand more about this small but great country.

Humanity is the core of country. Firstly, you may meet local accents with the expansion of familiar people. Accent is indeed a represent the custom in many ethnic groups in China. People who master local accents may mean that they live in local for long time and familiar with local places. After talking with these people, you may find out more than standing in front of museums and even try to bargain with local merchants in accents for a special price.Secondly, people may talk about some fantasy legends never popular outside oreven some views upon government or education to this region. You could reflect on this country objectively. Under the nervous circumstance between China and Japan, many families disallow their chirdren travel this country and seem every Japanese terrible. However, only if have a deeply talk with Japanese teenagers, you will find it is a totally misunderstanding upon them since actually no normal people is likely to pay attention to the government activities about some history matters.

No one could erase the beneficial of museumin comprehension of regions, however, it is not the best way to make people learning about countries precisely. You could better choose a way adapted by yourself, then enjoy it without pressure.

免费托福写作批改后：

Museums have existed all over the world to date. Almost everyone has experience occurring a museum fulfill of masterpieces and wallowing in it. Frankly, as well as travel agencies, people always consider visiting museums as a 【the】most efficiency way to gasp all about a country.I, however, hold an opinion there are better ways to be accepted by a region.

Food is totally a weapon of mass destruction to look through a country. 【分论点就喜欢你这样简洁大方的，句子难度和闪光词汇都有，继续保持】On the one hand, it is no doubt that people will chase for delicious eating in an unfamiliar country. France, which is famous for the red wine, has attracted a large amount of tourists seeking for the origin there. As well as the museum, or even better, red wine take people to recognize the special culture in France. On the other hand,eating could lead people to retrieve long history. In Japan, nearly every sushi shop hangs pictures on wall showing to customers. Walk into, sit down and look around, you’ll absolutely attracted by the history story about food revealing from those pictures. Japanese short but complex history will bring you into its unique history uncouciously and let you understand more about this small but great country.【你简单流畅的句子，和严谨的逻辑是托福外国阅卷人所喜欢的，继续保持】

Humanity is the core of country. Firstly, you may meet local accents with the expansion of familiar people. Accent is indeed a represent the custom in many ethnic groups in China. People who master local accents may mean that they live in local for long time and familiar with local places. After talking with these people, you may find out more than standing in front of museums and even try to bargain with local merchants in accents for a special price.Secondly, people may talk about some fantasy legends never popular outside oreven some views upon government or education to this region. You could reflect on this country objectively. Under the nervous circumstance between China and Japan, many families disallow their chirdren travel this country and seem every Japanese terrible. However, only if have a deeply talk with Japanese teenagers, you will find it is a totally misunderstanding upon them since actually no normal people is likely to pay attention to the government activities about some history matters.【这段逻辑顺序 你自己有感觉吧 是不是稍微有点乱了;精简一点 。句子难度 词汇多样性 你都是有的】

No one could erase the beneficial of museumin comprehension of regions, however, it is not the best way to make people learning about countries precisely. You could better choose a way adapted by yourself, then enjoy it without pressure.

我很满意，完全是符合标准的。