Do you agree or disagree the following statement?In order to become financially adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
学生原文：
In this day and age, people are more concerned about materialistic life with the accelerating development of economy. In this regard, parents are placing great emphasis on their children's ability to handle money. Whether it is appropriate or not to allow children to manage their money at a young age has been a tough question putting to worried parents. On personal level, I give my vote to the statement.
Granted, I concede that it may become a disaster when children improperly handle considerable money at a young age without parents' directions. As is often the case, lacking self-control, children will buy unnecessary toys at the first glance at the fancy things. Furthermore, caught by the major charm of computer games, they are inclined to invest money in the virtual characters in the games. Contrary to the original purpose of their parents giving pocket money to them, not only do they fail to learn the ability to manage money, but also they have wasted a great amount of money. Problematic as it seems, we should also bear in mind that allowing children to manager their money at a young age is not without its merits.
To begin with, it is universally acknowledged that good habits are easily formed at a rather young age. If children can develop a good sense of money and a good habit of managing money, they will inveterately root in their characteristics. In this sense, in order to train the kids into financially responsible adults, parents really ought to provide their children with a golden opportunity to handle their own money. For instance, my cousin Lucy, who is a grade 4 students, has routinely pocket money for 50 yuan a month. It is not worth mentioning to adults, while it is a great deal of money for the kid. She has planned how to spend her treasure with her mother's guide. Twenty percent is used to buy snacks, thirty percent is for toys,and the rest is for deposit. Through the excellent practice, she learned how to make a budget and to save some money for the future use as well. Hence, It is hard to overstate the significance of leading children to manage their money.
Moreover, the second reason for my propensity is that children will assume the responsibility of themselves by handling money on their own. Since parents offer freedom and confidence to their kids, their children feel a sense of responsibility and being trusted. Take myself as an example, my parents and I have a deal that they will give me an amount of money every month. But if I use up my money at the beginning of the month, I will experience an uptight life without any extra money. What I can learn from this is more than the good habit of managing money, it is about the way to lead a life. They raise my awareness that what I have done now may exert profound influence later.
In a nutshell, although this move may lead to many problems, and even bother some parents for a long time, its benefits bring to the development of children cannot be ignored. Accordingly, I am convinced that children should learn to manage their money at a young age. Only in this way can they form the good habit and cultivate a sense of responsibility.
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In this day and age, people are more concerned about materialistic life with the accelerating development of economy. In this regard, parents are placing great emphasis on their children's ability to handle money. Whether it is appropriate or not to allow children to manage their money at a young age has been a tough question putting to worried parents. On personal level, I give my vote to the statement【前面的陈述并不是一个观点，是一个两面的选择，所以没有同不同意一说】.
Granted, I concede that it may become a disaster when children improperly handle considerable money at a young age without parents' directions. As is often the case, lacking self-control, children will buy unnecessary toys at the first glance at the fancy things. Furthermore, caught by the major charm of computer games, they are inclined to invest money in the virtual characters in the games. Contrary to the original purpose of their parents giving pocket money to them, not only do they fail to learn the ability to manage money, but also they have wasted a great amount of money. Problematic as it seems, we should also bear in mind that allowing children to manager their money at a young age is not without its merits.【倒装句的使用要适度】
To begin with, it is universally acknowledged that good habits are easily formed at a rather young age. If children can a good sense of money develop and a good habit of managing money, they will inveterately root in their characteristics. In this sense, in order to train the kids into financially responsible adults, parents really ought to provide their children with a golden opportunity to handle their own money. For instance, my cousin Lucy, who is a grade 4 students, has routinely pocket money for 50 yuan a month. It is not worth mentioning to adults, while it is a great deal of money for the kid. She has planned how to spend her treasure with her mother's guide. Twenty percent is used to buy snacks, thirty percent is for toys,and the rest is for deposit. Through the excellent practice, she learned how to make a budget and to save some money for the future use as well. Hence, It is hard to overstate the significance of leading children to manage their money.【例子恰当，论述也比较严谨】
Moreover, the second reason for my propensity is that children will assume the responsibility of themselves by handling money on their own. Since parents offer freedom and confidence to their kids, their children feel a sense of responsibility and being trusted. Take myself as an example, my parents and I have a deal that they will give me an amount of money every month. But if I use up my money at the beginning of the month, I will experience an uptight life without any extra money. What I can learn from this is more than the good habit of managing money, it is about the way to lead a life. They raise my awareness that what I have done now may exert profound influence later.
In a nutshell, although this move may lead to many problems, and even bother some parents for a long time, its benefits bring to the development of children cannot be ignored. Accordingly, I am convinced that children should learn to manage their money at a young age. Only in this way can they form the good habit and cultivate a sense of responsibility.【总结比较到位】
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