Many old building are protected by the law because they are part of a nation’s history. However, some people think they should be knocked down to make for new ones
学生原文：
The issue of whether government should demolish old buildings in purpose of constructing building of a modern style has triggered an intense controversy. Advocates of this issue claim that old buildings are of limited use and can hardly satisfy the ongoing needs of modern life, while others believe that the preservation of them outweigh itsdrawbacks. From my perspective, this issue is closely linked to what the type of buildings in questions is
Undeniably, there are some old buildings are of historical, aesthetic,or cultural value,and they are truely irreplaceable .Many aged architectures are preserved by the government to commemorate the historical events or important individuals ,such as famous scientists ,artists and leaders,which give citizens a sense of cultural identity. Some buildings designed in a certain period of history typically present the characters of that time. Therefore,pushing downthose old buildings would definitely impair the cultural identity of the country. Moreover,some old building is so unique that it can be regarded as a landmark of the city or country. As a result ,it attracts numerous touristsfrom other parts of the world. It is fair to say that old buildings of this kind are much more important than any new building and perform more function than any other building.
In terms of other old buildings ,which have little special or specific value for the country ,the destruction of these building is plausible and acceptable . With low frequency of utilisation and high maintenance fee, these building have been a hurdle to the economic development of countries. What worse is that they may in such poor conditions that may potentially pose a threat to the safety of the dwellers.Accordingly,the replacement of these building with new ones is justifiable.
As indicated above,whether to destroy an old building and establish a new one depends on its type . For those having much special significance ,old buildings should be conserved as a cultural heritage . For others ,they should be demolished to facilitate the development of modern society.
请问老师：像这种agree or disagree类型 的可不可以 用本文的分类讨论进行展开
小站教育老师批改后：
The issue of whether government should demolish old buildings in purpose of【for the purpose of更好】 constructing 【new】building of a modern style has triggered an intense controversy. Advocates of this issue claim that old buildings are of limited use and can hardly satisfy the ongoing needs of modern life, while others believe that the 【significance of】preservation of them outweigh its drawbacks. From my perspective, this issue is closely linked to what the type of buildings in questions is
【一般agree or disagree的问题都需要在引入段给出自己的opinion，且一般来说这样的问法是就是agree 和disagree二者选其一，没有第三个选项。要么agree，要么disagree，即便你想两个都讨论到也必须是有偏向性的，能让别人明确看到你的导向点】
Undeniably, there are some old buildings【that】 are of historical, aesthetic,or cultural value, and they are truely irreplaceable .Many aged architectures are preserved by the government to commemorate the historical events or important individuals ,such as famous scientists ,artists and leaders,which give citizens a sense of cultural identity. Some buildings【were】 designed in a certain period of history 【补充个During a certain period in the history】 typically present【presenting】 the characters of that time【补充个feature of the time/age】. Therefore, pushing down those old buildings would definitely impair the cultural identity of the country. Moreover,some old building is so unique that it can be regarded as a landmark of the city or country. As a result ,it attracts numerous tourists from other parts of the world.【which will definitely generate economic value for the country as a whole】 It is fair to say that old buildings of this kind are much more important than any new building and【might even不要太绝对】 perform more function than any other building.
In terms of other old buildings ,which have little special or specific value for the country ,the destruction of these building is plausible and acceptable . With low frequency of utilisation and high maintenance fee, these building have been a hurdle to【不错】 the economic development of countries. What worse is that they may in such poor conditions that may【多样性可用will】 potentially pose a threat to the safety of the dwellers.Accordingly,the replacement of these buildings with new ones is【would sounds】 justifiable.
【hint：破旧的矮房子可以拆除，优点：美观市容改善脏乱差;适应人口的膨胀accomodate the growing population等等...】
As indicated above,whether to destroy an old building and establish a new one depends on its type . For those【old buildings who have...】 having much special significance ,old buildings should be conserved as a cultural heritage . For others ,they should be demolished to facilitate the development of modern society.
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