Some people think that the environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that the problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take some actions.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
学生原文：
With the ever-increasing quality of life and growing economy,people use more fuel-consumed cars for convenience.Factory’s dumping dirty water full of harmful chemistry elements is another common phenomenon.As a result,environmental problems have become stringent.Who is responsible for the problems has rised hot debate in society.
Some people believe that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve.They think government and factories should pay for the majority of dealing with environment deterioration.Enacting new laws restricting people’s behavior and stating punishments is of great importance.What is more,clean energy should be invented to aviod harmful emissions.
However, others argue that only with individuals’effort can the problems be solved.It is acknowledged that everyone’s effort accounts.If each person can pick up litters and not spit ,the street will be cleaner.If public transportation can be chosen more,the air will be clearer.If a tree can be planted by an individual,we can see a large amount of forests and blue sky one day.Individuals’s power should not be overlooked.
In my opinion,I firmly believe that with the joint effort of individuals,governments and factories ,environmental problems can be solved in the near future.From the government perspective,a systematic and reasonable regulations and rules should be carried out based on the unsatisfactory situation.As for factories which is the main destroyer of nature,obeying laws and rules and trying to recycle resources and use clean energy are necessary.What is more,individuals should raise awareness of protecting environment.Slow down the pace of life,you will appreciate the beauty of nature which is home to every creature.It is high time that we began take actions together to fight for our home.
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With the ever-increasing quality of life and growing economy, people【begin to】 use more fuel-consumed【fuel-consuming或者fuel-guzzling 】 cars for convenience【which could largely improve their life standard】.Factory’s dumping dirty water full【建议参考we won't even blink if we heard the news like aome factories are found to dump its waste water which is glutted with lots of unrecognizable harmful elements into the river or something... 】 of harmful chemistry elements is another common phenomenon.As a result,environmental problems have become stringent【stringent不太恰当，宜用 worse。建议参考even worse and even start to endangering people's ordinary life】.Who is responsible for the problems has rised hot debate in society.
Some people believe that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve【用too..to be addressed by individuals增加多样性】.They think government and factories should pay for the majority【意思是没错，但是表达欠妥当，建议参考：it is government as well as the factories that ought to take main responsibility to deal with environment deterioration 】 of dealing with environment deterioration. 【Government in particular could make the following things possible，such as】Enacting new laws restricting people’s behavior and stating punishments is of great importance【educating people the importance of calling off pollution】.What is more,clean energy should be【in place to be ready to replace the coal-dominant 】 invented to aviod harmful emissions.
However, others argue that only with individuals’ effort can the problems be solved. It is acknowledged that everyone’s effort accounts. If each person can pick up litters and not spit ,the street will be cleaner.If public transportation can be chosen 【utilized more effectively】more,the air will be clearer. If a tree can be planted by an individual, we can see a large amount of forests and blue sky one day. 【therefore】Individuals’s power should not be overlooked.
In my opinion,I firmly believe that with the joint effort of individuals, governments and factories ,environmental problems can be solved in the near future. From the government perspective,a systematic and reasonable regulations and rules should be carried out based on the unsatisfactory situation. As for factories which is the main destroyer of nature【who are mainly liable for the displeasing environment】,obeying laws and rules and trying to recycle resources and use clean energy are necessary. What is more,individuals should raise awareness of protecting environment. Slow down the pace of life,you will appreciate the beauty of nature which is home to every creature.It is high time that we began【begin to】take actions together to fight for our【beloved】 home.
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文章总体不错，语言运用和句子的通畅度都还可以。文章内容也比较充实，但是句子衔接上还要再加把劲，有时候两句好句子直接就会因为缺少一个恰当的关系连接词而失色不少，所以要注意context，善用从句和连接词。请继续努力！
