Some people think that the environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve.Others, however, believe that the problems cannot be solved if individuals donot take some actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
学生原文：
As the rapid development of our human civilization. The prosperity of our lives is tightly attended by theever-increasing worse environmental pollution. Not like the partial regions orareas’ disorders in environment before the industrial revolution, nowadays, increasing pollution shows its world-scale influence, such as the prevalent global warmingand the deforestation especially in inland countries where are short of water. Sothis condition really calls for our utmost efforts including not only the individuals, but also the governments and any other similar organizations.
Apparently, the final solving of thechronic and prolonged worldwide environmental problems can never be merely relied on individuals. By which I mean, the governments and related organizations should also hold their responsibilities and in most cases, take the lead.Taking the governments for example, through enacting stringent laws and regulating the relevant rules, governments can restrict people’s behaviors about destroying the environment. What’s more, compared with the separate and discontinue actions of individuals, the advantagesin raising funds, technology utilizing as well as proficient management of governments really make the perseveration courses much more cost-effective andproductive. According to the description above, to combat the difficult environmental pollution, the indispensable significance of governments as well as related organizations should never be overlooked.
However, It is the people that arethe real masters of our society, and what’s more, they are the direct victimsof the serious pollutants; therefore, the right to better the living environmental condition should totally be respected and protected. Apart fromthese voluntary actions, people can do many convenient activities in their ordinary lives to improve the condition, such as less private car driving tocut down the emissions, planting trees to decorate our planet greener. Above all, individuals, no matter are out of voluntary or just under-stimulated toimplement in daily lives, can really better our environmental condition. More importantly, because of the huge number in population, individuals’ endeavors are definitely imperative.
From my own perspective, the realistic seriousness of environmental pollution really needs the joint effortsof any kinds of members in the whole world. Granted, the governments and special organizations have their comparative advantages than individuals, butto solve the complex environmental problems completely, the power and potentialof individuals as a whole really need to be exploited.
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As the rapid development of our human civilization. The prosperity of our lives is tightly attended by theever-increasing worse environmental pollution. Not like the partial regions orareas’ disorders in environment before the industrial revolution, nowadays, increasing pollution shows its world-scale influence, such as the prevalent global warmingand the deforestation especially in inland countries where are short of water. Sothis condition really calls for our utmost efforts including not only the individuals, but also the governments and any other similar organizations.【这边你应该说我会从两面去探讨这个问题，因为题目要求你去分析两种观点，你这里面提出的观点只是回应了第一种观点，比如：I wil explore both of these two sides in this essay】
第一段我们一般按照三个层次来展开：背景介绍——改写题目——自己的观点。这样的写法会使第一段比较的充实，内容丰富。你缺少了第二个层次，注意一下。
Apparently, the final solving of thechronic and prolonged worldwide environmental problems can never be merely relied on individuals. By which I mean, the governments and related organizations should also hold their responsibilities and in most cases, take the lead.Taking the governments for example, through enacting stringent laws and regulating the relevant rules, governments can restrict people’s behaviors about destroying the environment. What’s more, compared with the separate and discontinue actions of individuals, the advantagesin raising funds, technology utilizing as well as proficient management of governments really make the perseveration courses much more cost-effective andproductive. According to the description above, to combat the difficult environmental pollution, the indispensable significance of governments as well as related organizations should never be overlooked.【这一段里面你直接论述了政府的作用，可是组织的作用丝毫没有提到，这个不太好。你应该分两面讲，比如说政府可以加强监管，组织可以提供资金等】
However, It is the people that arethe real masters of our society, and what’s more, they are the direct victimsof the serious pollutants;therefore, the right to better the living environmental condition should totally be respected and protected. Apart fromthese voluntary actions, people can do many convenient activities in their ordinary lives to improve the condition, such as less private car driving tocut down the emissions, planting trees to decorate our planet greener. Above all, individuals, no matter are out of voluntary or just under-stimulated toimplement in daily lives, can really better our environmental condition. More importantly, because of the huge number in population, individuals’ endeavors are definitely imperative.
From my own perspective, the realistic seriousness of environmental pollution really needs the joint effortsof any kinds of members in the whole world. Granted, the governments and special organizations have their comparative advantages than individuals, butto solve the complex environmental problems completely, the power and potentialof individuals as a whole really need to be exploited.【这句话总结的很好】
估分：6-6.5分段
评价：文章论述时候段落内部结构更严谨点就好了。整个的思路很好，没有什么问题。
