Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for government to spend money on new buildings than to preserve historic or traditional buildings.
学生原文：
When it comes to the issue whether government should spend money on new buildings than preserve historic or traditional buildings and homes, there are substantial divergent opinions. Some people prefer to state that historic or traditional buildings should be preserved, especially government should spend most of the expense. While others may believe that it is essential to invest money on new buildings in the rapid development of society. On personal level, I prefer the prior one that government are suggested to spend more money on traditional buildings.
Traditional buildings are symbol of civilization. As we all know, every country has its symbolic building. For example, when people see the pyramid, they will come up with the country, Egypt, while people may state the Summer Palace is a representation of China. So traditional buildings need to be preserved. However, there are many problems impacting the completion of these buildings, such as acid rain. It is necessary for government to invest money on protecting these symbols.
Traditional buildings have educational function, which not only reflects affairs in the past, but also encourage people nowadays, even in the future. Some buildings, such as the houses where celebrities lived before their death, are attracted tourists who admires the celebrities and appreciate their certain characteristics. And there exist some buildings like the old library in our city, which has been built since our country was established. A large number of people go to the library to charge and enrich themselves. What measures should be taken when the library need to be repaired? There is no doubt that government spend money to do the repairing.
What is more, traditional buildings are also precious. Some of the buildings are unique. Take the Quadrangle Courtyard as an example, every courtyard is unique. And they are the heritage to culture in China. In fact, the value of the courtyard is not only in its heritage to culture, but also in price. According to the coverage, the price of the Quadrangle Courtyard is about one hundred million, which is a tremendous figure. So it is essential for government to spend money to preserve these valuabe constructions.
In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, I may draw a conclusion that government should spend money to preserve historic or traditional buildings than build new ones.
小站教育老师批改后：
When it comes to the issue whether government should spend money on new buildings than preserve historic or traditional buildings and homes, there are substantial divergent opinions. Some people prefer to state that historic or traditional buildings should be preserved, especially government should spend most of the expense. While others may believe that it is essential to invest money on new buildings in the rapid development of society. On personal level, I prefer the prior one that government are【is】suggested to spend more money on traditional buildings.
Traditional buildings are symbol of civilization. As we all know, every country has its symbolic building. For example, when people see the pyramid, they will come up with the country, Egypt, while people may state the Summer Palace is a representation of China. So traditional buildings need to be preserved. However, there are many problems impacting the completion【completeness】of these buildings, such as acid rain. It is necessary for government to invest money on protecting these symbols.
Traditional buildings have educational function, which not only reflects【复数】affairs in the past, but also encourage people nowadays, even in the future. Some buildings, such as the houses where celebrities lived before their death, are attracted tourists who admires【admire】the celebrities and appreciate their certain characteristics. And there exist【改为are， there be 句型】some buildings like the old library in our city, which has been built since our country was established. A large number of people go to the library to charge and enrich themselves. What measures should be taken when the library need to be repaired? There is no doubt that government spend money to do the repairing【repairment】.
What is more, traditional buildings are also precious. Some of the buildings are unique. Take the Quadrangle Courtyard as an example, every courtyard is unique. And they are the heritage to culture in China. In fact, the value of the courtyard is not only in its heritage to culture, but also in price. According to the coverage, the price of the Quadrangle Courtyard is about one hundred million, which is a tremendous figure. So it is essential for government to spend money to preserve these valuabe constructions.
In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, I may draw a conclusion that government should spend money to preserve historic or traditional buildings than build new ones.【前面应该适当提一下new building】
【论点不错，逻辑严谨，语言运用也比较熟练。还需注意一些细节，特别是主谓一致】
