It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
学生原文：
Nowadays, people who can do well in certain area are, in most cases, are called talents.Some individuals tend to attribute their achievement to the gifts those people are born with. Yet some others assert that the practice and training are the keys to the success. I, personally, agree that training and practice shall play a bigger role in one’s success.
Undeniably, some people can learn something much faster than others. One cannot say with certainty that he has never witnessed a real life case that, even are taught at the same time, under the same condition, some students can understand the teacher much faster as well as can use the knowledge newly learned much better. On top of that, some individuals, even without being trained, tend to show the abilities in certain area. As we can always hear some cases that one can play a certain type of musical instrument despite the fact that he has only seen it being played once. What is more, one tends to achieve much bigger success than his counterparts even less time and effort is devoted.
However, one’s talent can not make him really good at something, but training and practice can. Some individuals are sure being blessed with some certain talents, but they failed to fully explore it, instead, they take it for granted and treat it as a shortcut to avoid the practice. Without doubt, they ended up with being mediocre, and to them, their talents are more like a joke other than a gift. Aside from that, to be always on the top of certain area, people need to train and practice constantly. Take the sportsmen for instance. No matter how good he is at his field, without the proper training even for a few weeks, he might find him struggling in the fierce competition.
People’s development is like riding a bike. One’s talents is like a pushing hand behind, it sure can accelerate the speed. But without the main drive from the pedals(practice and training), none can really reach the path of success.
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Nowadays, people who can do well in certain areaare, in most cases, are【两个系动词了，只需一个】called talents.Some individuals tend to attribute their achievement to the gifts those people are born with. Yet some others assert that the practice and training are the keys to the success. I, personally, agree that training and practice shall play a bigger role in one’s success.
Undeniably, some people can learn something much faster than others. One cannot say with certainty that he has never witnessed a real life case that, even are taught at the same time, under the same condition, some students can understand the teacher much faster as well as can use【apply更合适】 the knowledge newly learned【结构稍微需要调换一下newly learned/learnt/acquired knowledge】 much better. On top of that, some individuals, even without being trained【也可以直接用training这个动名词来替代被动】tend to show the abilities in certain area. As we can always hear some cases that one can play a certain type of musical instrument despite the fact that he has only seen it being played once. What is more, one tends to achieve much bigger success than his counterparts even less time and effort is devoted.【逻辑上存在问题，one没有明确的指代对象，虽然中文语意上能猜到你是在说那些gifted person】
However, one’s talent 【加个小词alone】can not make him really good at something, but【转折词挨太近有点别扭】 training and practice can. Some individuals are sure being blessed with some certain talents, but they failed to fully explore it, instead, they take it for granted and treat it as a shortcut to avoid the practice【意思表达上稍稍有些奇怪，应该把天才当成是自己的资本就认为可以不勤加练习，就像龟兔赛跑，或者可参考they treat their talent as shortcut to success speeded by God，as success seems to be with in their reach at first. inevitably some of these so called talents tend to neglect the significance of practice】 they ended up with being mediocre, and to them, their talents are more like a joke other than a gift. Aside from that, to be always on the top of certain area, people need to train and practice constantly. Take the sportsmen for instance. No matter how good he is at his field, without the proper training even for【for even更舒畅】 a few weeks, he might find him struggling in the fierce competition.
People’s development is like riding a bike. One’s talents is like a pushing hand behind【表达的有点chinglish了，driving force或者propelling force】, it sure【which for sure】 can accelerate the speed. But without the main drive from the pedals(practice and training), none can really reach the path of success.
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点评：
两个观点都谈到了，内容较为丰富，但是要注意写作的时候避免带入过多的中文思路，有点中文在脑子里直译的感觉，容易让阅卷老师不理解你想表达的内容。你在给出自己的opinion的时候可以稍微再多一两句，不是只在最后收尾的时候喊一个口号，略显仓促，望以后注意。对词语的选取上也要注意，不能chinglish，多多看看别人写的，学习一些好的词汇来丰富自己的文章。语法上的问题已经有所进步，希望保持，继续努力！
