Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Computers, calculators, internet.... Children today are surrounded by all kinds of advancing technology tools that can't be imagined by the children before. When it comes to the issue whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past, I definitely agree with it and I will give my reasons below to illustrate my view point.
First of all, children today depend too much on the technology appliances instead of their brains, which will lower their ability of creativity. Children in the past, for instance, had not so much novel things to play with and they just made some statues or sculptures with the mud in their gardens. Through this kind of shaping activity, children develop their skills of inventing and creating new things as well as cultivate their minds to make them smarter and more curious. However, if we look around, we will find that children today tend to receive knowledge from the internet rather than think for themselves, since it is so convenient that they can get the information they want without thinking. Besides, they tend to follow the instructions shown on the internet rather than to add their own ideas when solving the problems, which does no good to the development of children's creativity.
Secondly, the easiness of getting information also let the children today become too lazy to think about creating. Take my cousin for example, he likes to surf the internet to keep on the latest trend. Once his teacher gave him an assignment to make a model car with some paper. What astounded me was that he turned to the internet without any hesitation and find the process of making a car model on a website. The aim of the homework was to inspire the creativity of students. Nevertheless, my young cousin just turned it into something that is just a waste of time. When asked why not create a car with his own design, he simply answered:" Why should I do invention when the things can be found on the internet?" When we quest cause of this phenomenon,everything points to the technology, which has sucked him into a blackhole of laziness,and laziness is a fatal enermy of creativity.
Admittedly, technology may have many advantages which can help children learn things efficiently and are helpful to cultivate their creativity. However, how to make full use of it to help children is a difficult task and should be considered thoroughly. Broadly speaking, technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
First of all, children today depend too much on the technology appliances instead of their brains, which will lower their ability of creativity. Children in the past, for instance, had not so much novel things to play with and they just made some statues or sculptures with the mud in their gardens. Through this kind of shaping activity, children develop their skills of inventing and creating new things as well as cultivate their minds to make them smarter and more curious. However, if we look around, we will find that children today tend to receive knowledge from the internet rather than think for themselves, since it is so convenient that they can get the information they want without thinking. Besides, they tend to follow the instructions shown on the internet rather than to add their own ideas when solving the problems, which does no good to the development of children's creativity.
Secondly, the easiness of getting information also let the children today become too lazy to think about creating. Take my cousin for example, he likes to surf the internet to keep on the latest trend. Once his teacher gave him an assignment to make a model car with some paper. What astounded me was that he turned to the internet without any hesitation and find the process of making a car model on a website. The aim of the homework was to inspire the creativity of students. Nevertheless, my young cousin just turned it into something that is just a waste of time. When asked why not create a car with his own design, he simply answered:" Why should I do invention when the things can be found on the internet?" When we quest cause of this phenomenon,everything points to the technology, which has sucked him into a blackhole of laziness,and laziness is a fatal enermy of creativity.
Admittedly, technology may have many advantages which can help children learn things efficiently and are helpful to cultivate their creativity. However, how to make full use of it to help children is a difficult task and should be considered thoroughly. Broadly speaking, technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
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小站教育老师批改后：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computers, calculators, internet.... Children today are surrounded by all kinds of advancing【advanced】 technology tools that can't be imagined by the children before【表述赘余，改为technology tools unimaginable before即可】. When it comes to the issue whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past, I definitely agree with it【前面是whether引导的将句子，有双面性，这里不能简单的同意】 and I will give my reasons below to illustrate my view point.
First of all, children today depend too much on the technology appliances instead of their brains, which will lower their ability of creativity【中式表达】. Children in the past, for instance, had not so much novel things to play with and they just made some statues or sculptures with the mud in their gardens. Through this kind of shaping activity, children develop their skills of inventing and creating new things as well as cultivate their minds to make them smarter and more curious【既然是过去就该用过去时】. However, if we look around, we will find that children today tend to receive knowledge from the internet rather than think for【介词不当，改为by或直接去掉】 themselves, since it is so convenient that they can get the information they want without thinking. Besides, they tend to follow the instructions shown on the internet rather than to add their own ideas when solving the problems, which does no good to the development of children's creativity.【这个点是很容易就能想到的，论述得还不错】
Secondly, the easiness of getting information also let the children today become too lazy to think about creating. Take my cousin for example, he likes to surf the internet to keep on the latest trend. Once his teacher gave him an assignment to make a model car with some paper. What astounded me was that he turned to the internet without any hesitation and find the process of making a car model on a website. The aim of the homework was to inspire the creativity of students. Nevertheless, my young cousin just turned it into something that is just a waste of time【什么意思？it和that各代指什么】. When asked why not create a car with his own design, he simply answered:" Why should I do invention when the things can be found on the internet?" When we quest cause of this phenomenon,everything points to the technology, which has sucked him into a blackhole of laziness,and laziness is a fatal enermy of creativity.
Admittedly, technology may have many advantages which can help children learn things efficiently and are helpful to cultivate their creativity. However, how to make full use of it to help children is a difficult task and should be considered thoroughly. Broadly speaking, technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
【总体不错，表述流畅，论述清晰。其实没必要纠结一定要三个论点，两个论点充分展开也是可以的。如果还需要再一个点可以尝试写怎么运用technology以激活孩子的创造力，那样就要注意字数】
Computers, calculators, internet.... Children today are surrounded by all kinds of advancing【advanced】 technology tools that can't be imagined by the children before【表述赘余，改为technology tools unimaginable before即可】. When it comes to the issue whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past, I definitely agree with it【前面是whether引导的将句子，有双面性，这里不能简单的同意】 and I will give my reasons below to illustrate my view point.
First of all, children today depend too much on the technology appliances instead of their brains, which will lower their ability of creativity【中式表达】. Children in the past, for instance, had not so much novel things to play with and they just made some statues or sculptures with the mud in their gardens. Through this kind of shaping activity, children develop their skills of inventing and creating new things as well as cultivate their minds to make them smarter and more curious【既然是过去就该用过去时】. However, if we look around, we will find that children today tend to receive knowledge from the internet rather than think for【介词不当，改为by或直接去掉】 themselves, since it is so convenient that they can get the information they want without thinking. Besides, they tend to follow the instructions shown on the internet rather than to add their own ideas when solving the problems, which does no good to the development of children's creativity.【这个点是很容易就能想到的，论述得还不错】
Secondly, the easiness of getting information also let the children today become too lazy to think about creating. Take my cousin for example, he likes to surf the internet to keep on the latest trend. Once his teacher gave him an assignment to make a model car with some paper. What astounded me was that he turned to the internet without any hesitation and find the process of making a car model on a website. The aim of the homework was to inspire the creativity of students. Nevertheless, my young cousin just turned it into something that is just a waste of time【什么意思？it和that各代指什么】. When asked why not create a car with his own design, he simply answered:" Why should I do invention when the things can be found on the internet?" When we quest cause of this phenomenon,everything points to the technology, which has sucked him into a blackhole of laziness,and laziness is a fatal enermy of creativity.
Admittedly, technology may have many advantages which can help children learn things efficiently and are helpful to cultivate their creativity. However, how to make full use of it to help children is a difficult task and should be considered thoroughly. Broadly speaking, technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
【总体不错，表述流畅，论述清晰。其实没必要纠结一定要三个论点，两个论点充分展开也是可以的。如果还需要再一个点可以尝试写怎么运用technology以激活孩子的创造力，那样就要注意字数】
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