题目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
学生原文：
Friend,which is the essential people in one's life ,have influenced our life at different aspects.Some people make friends at different stage of life,as a result ,some of whom think that keeping the relationship with a old friend is much important than a new one.As fo me, i definently disapprove of that if taking the need for one in new situation of study ,working or daily life into consideration.
When a men move to a new place such as a new university ,where is far away from your hometown as well as your old friends .Think of this condition : if you want to study or taking exersise such as plying basketball ,what should you do? Call your old friends to come here to help support your course or playing basketball with your?It is obivious for you wodo this unless you try to making new friend,who may stay with you for about 4 years .Compared with a new friend , old friends seems a little weak for you to get on well with a new place .
Making a new friends is of vital importance for a person in her daily life .What's more, it is a essential element requirement for one to develop a new relattionship with other people .One can not live in the past for a perstant time without touching new man,whith causing a men suffer a negative relitionship with the people surronding.When you discern that a man owing huge number of friends in a new company,would not you fell a little lonely?When you see your classmate who sharing his
happiness with new friends or go shopping with them ,what your old friends can do for you at the same condition?What may be a pity that your old friends may also have a new friends ,nevetheless you are still swamped in the relationship of old friendships.
I have to admitted that a old friends can provide you an stable favour for a long time when they stay with you, but that not mean it is important for you to keep your old friend than to make a new one .New friends is an essential person in your future life.What i want to mention is that :it may be interesting when you take this standpoint in to your mind: if you do not make new friend how can you get a old friend?not to say that mention the important of an old friendshio.iN A WORD ,as far as i'm concerned, it is more imprtant to make new friend than keep a new one,if not ,it is equal to do that.
老师批改：
Friend, which[去掉] is the essential people in one's life, have influenced our life at different aspects.[ Friend, the essential people in one's life, have influenced our life at different aspects.] Some people make friends at different stage of life, as a result ,some of whom think that keeping the relationship with a{an} old friend is much [more] important than a new one. As fo me, i[I] definently[definitely] disapprove of that if taking the need for one in new situation of study ,working or daily life into consideration[???].
When a men move to a new place such as a new university ,where is far away from your hometown as well as your old friends[指称代词要保持一致] .Think of this condition : if you want to study or taking exersise [exercise]such as plying basketball ,what should you do? Call your old friends to come here to help support [两个动词]your course or playing basketball with your? It is obivious [obvious] for you wodo[???] this unless you try to making new friend[friends], who may stay with you for about 4 years .Compared with a new friend , old friends seems[old friends seem/ old friend seems] a little weak for you to get on well with a new place[get on well with 一般指人与人之间相处融洽] .
Making a new friends is of vital importance for a person in her daily life .What's more, it is a{an} essential element requirement[两个名词，没有并列词] for one to develop a new relattionship [relationship] with other people .One can not live in the past for a perstant time[???] without touching new man[men],whith causing[which causes/causing] a men[a man] suffer a negative relattionship [relationship] with the people surronding[surrounding]. When you discern that a man owing huge number of friends in a new company,would not[去掉] you fell a little lonely? When you see your classmate who sharing[shares] his
happiness with new friends or go shopping with them ,what your old friends can do for you at the same condition?What may be[去掉] a pity that your old friends may also have a new friends{ a new friend/ new friends } ,nevetheless [nevertheless]you are still swamped in the relationship of old friendships[you are still swamped in the old friendships].
I have to admitted that a[an] old friends can provide you an stable favour for a long time when they stay with you, but that not mean[it doesn’t mean that] it is important for you to keep your old friend[old friends] than[都没有比较对象] to make a new one .New friends is an essential person in your future life. What i want to mention is that :[去掉冒号]it may be interesting when you take this standpoint in to your mind: if you do not make new friend how can you get a old friend? not to say that mention{ not to mention即可} the important of an old friendshio.iN A WORD{?} ,as far as i'm concerned, it is more important[important] to make new friend than keep a new one,if not ,it is equal to do that[??句子没写完?]
老师点评：
预估分数：2.5-
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