题目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects onthe way young people behave.
原文：
After movie and television invented, the debate about whether these two entertainment way can destroy human's life become never stop. Since movie or TV can bring lots of fun to normal people, every family have at least one set of TV, parents won't take it seriously to forbid youngster to watch TV, but actually, there are many disadvantages with watching TV for teenager, and it's necessary to take them away from TV or movie.
To the first point, the major mission of a student is to learn knowledge, and to get a good performance in school, every student should spend as many as possible time on their study. But a TV can take some student lots of time, which they can used on study, thus one more hour they put on TV, one less hour they can used on study. What's more, if you want to watch a movie in the theatre, you have to spend at least one hour on the way, the time waste can be more seriously if you watching movie usually.
After that, when a student addict to TV or movie, they will lose interesting about other things, including sports, reading and study. As a recent survey shows, the average mounts of time a guy spend on TV every day is relevant to their disability to communicating with others. It means after long time watching every day, you may lost the basic ability of talk with other people.
Last but not least, since the colorful and exciting scenery on your TV may seem dreamful, it can actually damage your creative ability, and it is the most important ability a modern teenager should have. I have a sister who used be a very talented painting student, she can sketch everything after watching it for 10 minutes, every member of our family believed that she will become our family's honor. Unfortunately, after she watched a TV series, she became crazy about every soap opera cast on TV, and the time she used on practice art skill became less and less, at last she lost her painting talent and become a normal saleswoman.
To conclusion, there are lot of fun from TV and movie, but there are also lot of dangerous among these two things, to our youngster, we should better keep away from them, and don't waste time on them.
Bernie 老师批改 ：
Bernie 老师批改 ：
After movie and television 【 are】 invented, the debate about whether these two entertainment way can destroy human's life become never stop【改为: never stoped】. Since movie or TV can bring lots of fun to normal people, every family have at least one set of TV, parents won't take it seriously to forbid youngster【乖，要用复数，改为: youngsters】 to watch TV, but actually, there are many disadvantages with watching TV for teenager, and it's necessary to take them away from TV or movie【乖，最好能明确表述这是自己的观点~可以参见范文~】.
To the first point, the major mission of a student is to learn knowledge, and to get a good performance in school, every student should spend as many as possible【改为: much】 time on their study【这个论点能很好的论证自己的观点，但是不够简洁~】. But a TV can take some student【改为: students】 lots of time, which they can used on study, thus one more hour they put on TV, one less hour they can used【要用: use】 on study. What's more, if you want to watch a movie in the theatre, you have to spend at least one hour on the way, the time waste can be more seriously if you watching movie usually.
After that, when a student 【 is】 addict to TV or movie, they will lose interesting【表示兴趣，改为: interest】 about other things, including sports, reading and study【这个论点不错，能很有力的论证自己的观点~】. As a recent survey shows, the average mounts of time a guy spend on TV every day is relevant to their disability to communicating【改为: communicate】 with others. It means after long time watching【 TV or television】 every day, you may lost the basic ability of talk【改为: talking】 with other people.
Last but not least, since the colorful and exciting scenery on your TV may seem dreamful, it can actually damage your creative ability, and it is the most important ability a modern teenager should have【这个论点也不错，不过作为主题句应该写的简洁一些~】. I have a sister who used be a very talented painting student, she can sketch everything after watching it for 10 minutes, every member of our family believed that she will become our family's honor. Unfortunately, after she watched a TV series, she became crazy about every soap opera cast on TV, and the time she used on practice art skill became less and less, at last she lost her painting talent and become a normal saleswoman.
To conclusion, there are lot【改为: lots】 of fun from TV and movie[ s], but there are also lot of dangerous【改为: dangers】 among these two things, to our youngster[ s], we should better keep away from them, and don't waste time on them.【结论观点也较为明确~不错~】
注意每个论证段的开头句要写成既能有力论证观点又能概括本段中心大意的句子作为本段的主旨句，建议多参考一下范文的内容格式~！
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