Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic.
学生原文：
In China, there is a wild and universal problem of traffic congestion in almost all big cities, especially in first-tier cities. The reasons may be comprehensive, too many people, too many car and unreasonable rule distribution and management of traffic are the most primary reasons. Hence, drivers pay a fee when they driving in busy city street that possesses a great number of traffic should be a nice approach to release the traffic pressure.
First, if driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic must paying a fee, the drivers may keep away from the crowded areas. Generally, there is not only a way from one place to another place. But some ways are shorter than the others and can decrease the driving time. So, most drivers are more willing to drive along the shorter way. Then, there are more and more cars in these streets or roads little by little. Therefore, if the drivers keep away from the crowded areas to choose another little longer way when they must pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the traffic pressure of some crowded streets can be released.
Second, the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy city streets can be collected to rebuild or repair the roads or other public traffic facilities to relieve the traffic pressure. Another reason that contributes to the traffic pressure is the unsufficient or broken roads. The unsufficient or broken roads and streets can decrease the speed and the efficiency of driving. Then, if the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy areas can be used in traffic in turn, the traffic is not so terrible any more.
Finally, charging a fee for driving in busy city streets from drivers can reduce the traffic accident indirectly. More cars will cause more traffic accident, which should be a common sense. We can imagine that there are 10 cars and 100 cars running at a street in the meantime, the later certainly relate to frequent traffic accident. So, if the drivers must pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the cars will distribute more loosely and reasonably. Then, the traffic accident will not be so frequent.
In a conclusion, paying a fee when drivers driving in busy city streets can release the traffic pressure from different aspects, we should agree it is a wonderful approach.
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In China, there is a wild and universal problem of traffic congestion in almost all big cities, especially in first-tier cities. The reasons may be comprehensive, too many people, too many car and unreasonable rule distribution and management of traffic are the most primary reasons. Hence, drivers pay a fee when they driving in busy city street that possesses a great number of traffic should be a nice approach to release the traffic pressure.
First, if driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic must paying a fee, the drivers may keep away from the crowded areas. Generally, there is not only a way from one place to another place. But some ways are shorter than the others and can decrease the driving time. So, most drivers are more willing to drive along the shorter way. Then, there are more and more cars in these streets or roads little by little. Therefore, if the drivers keep away from the crowded areas to choose another little longer way when they must pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the traffic pressure of some crowded streets can be released.
Second, the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy city streets can be collected to rebuild or repair the roads or other public traffic facilities to relieve the traffic pressure. Another reason that contributes to the traffic pressure is the unsufficient or broken roads. The unsufficient or broken roads and streets can decrease the speed and the efficiency of driving. Then, if the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy areas can be used in traffic in turn, the traffic is not so terrible any more.
Finally, charging a fee for driving in busy city streets from drivers can reduce the traffic accident indirectly. More cars will cause more traffic accident, which should be a common sense. We can imagine that there are 10 cars and 100 cars running at a street in the meantime, the later certainly relate to frequent traffic accident. So, if the drivers must pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the cars will distribute more loosely and reasonably. Then, the traffic accident will not be so frequent.
In a conclusion, paying a fee when drivers driving in busy city streets can release the traffic pressure from different aspects, we should agree it is a wonderful approach.
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In China, there is a wild and universal problem of traffic congestion in almost all big cities, especially in first-tier cities. The reasons may be comprehensive, too many people, too many car and unreasonable rule distribution and management of traffic are the most primary reasons. Hence, drivers pay a fee when they driving in busy city street that possesses a great number of traffic should be a nice approach to release the traffic pressure【主语是什么，它可以做主语吗】.
First, if driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic must paying a fee【语法有问题。压缩主干变成driving must paying a fee,你自己也会发现不对吧】, the drivers may keep away from the crowded areas. Generally, there is not only a way from one place to another place. But some ways are shorter than the others and can decrease the driving time. So, most drivers are more willing to drive along the shorter way. Then, there are more and more cars in these streets or roads little by little. Therefore, if the drivers keep away from the crowded areas to choose another little longer way when they must【have to】 pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the traffic pressure of some【those】 crowded streets can be released.
Second, the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy city streets can be collected to rebuild or repair the roads or other public traffic facilities to relieve the traffic pressure. Another reason that contributes to the traffic pressure is the unsufficient or broken roads. The unsufficient or broken roads and streets can decrease the speed and the efficiency of driving. Then, if the money that the drivers pay for driving in busy areas can be used in traffic in turn, the traffic is not【will not be】 so terrible any more.
Finally, charging a fee for driving in busy city streets from drivers can reduce the traffic accident indirectly. More cars will cause more traffic accident, which should be a common sense. We can imagine that there are 10 cars and 100 cars running at a street in the meantime, the later certainly relate【单数吧，主语是”一种情况“】 to frequent traffic accident. So, if the drivers must pay a fee for driving in busy city streets, the cars will distribute more loosely and reasonably. Then, the traffic accident will not be so frequent.
In a conclusion, paying a fee when drivers driving in busy city streets can release the traffic pressure from different aspects【哪espects呢，要总结出来】, we should agree it is a wonderful approach.
【观点不错，逻辑也严谨。多注意细节词的运用】
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