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Nowadays, more and more high school students prefer to study in university instead of vocational school. According to the enrollment policy, universities should not only consider the applicants’ interest and qualifications but also make sure there is equal number of both genders in each subject.
This policy may be reasonable. On the level of society, accepting the same number of the applicants from different sexual can be seen as a kind of respect to the human right and sexual equality. It is not only helpful in promoting the justice atmosphere but also crucial in building the gender balanced in various industries. Secondly, from each individual’s perspective, the equal number of males and females can contribute to the communication skill between the different genders, which is the key success factor in teambuilding process during the work.
On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments. It must be realized that both male and female have own expert areas. Specifically, males are accomplished in abstract thinking and logic mind, which are extremely crucial in Math and Physics. Females are good at imaginal thinking so the task of designing and literature are easy for them. Regarding the diversified features between the different sexes, accepting more males in their expert areas is a method to utilize the human resources. The aim of this policy is to better improve and perfect the society.
In conclusion, it is not reasonable that the number of one gender in universities is totally dominated by the other gender. However, it is also unwise to ignore the differences between male and female. To balance these two factors, universities should accept equal numbers of two genders on the common subjects which are suitable for both male and female but on the special subjects such as engineering, students should be enrolled mostly based on their qualifications, interest and passion for the subject.
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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, more and more high school students prefer to study in university instead of vocational school. According to the enrollment policy,（没有依据，哪有这样的政策） universities should not only consider the applicants’ interest and qualifications but also make sure there is equal number of both genders in each subject. （加上自己的观点或者对正文内容的简介，这样读者会对你的下文内容有个整体的把握）
This policy（这只是一种opinion或者statement，不是policy，慎用） may be reasonable. （firstly,)On the level of society, accepting the same number of the applicants from different sexual can be seen as a kind of respect to the human right and sexual equality. It is not only helpful in promoting the justice atmosphere but also crucial in building the gender balanced in various industries. Secondly,(与firstly对应，否则结构上严谨性不强） from each individual’s perspective, the equal number of males and females can contribute to the communication skill between the different genders, which is the key success factor in teambuilding process during the work.
On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments. It must be realized that both male and female have own expert areas. Specifically, males are accomplished in abstract thinking and logic mind, which are extremely crucial in Math and Physics. Females are good at imaginal thinking so the task of designing and literature are easy for them. （males的情况如何呢？最好也说一下）Regarding the diversified features between the different sexes, accepting more males in their expert areas is a method to utilize the human resources. The aim of this policy is to better improve and perfect the society.
In conclusion, it is not reasonable that the number of one gender in universities is totally dominated by the other gender. However, it is also unwise to ignore the differences between male and female. To balance these two factors, universities should accept equal numbers of two genders on the common subjects which are suitable for both male and female but on the special subjects such as engineering, students should be enrolled mostly based on their qualifications, interest and passion for the subject.（按照你这个结论，正文应该大部分甚至全部分析接受同样多的男女学生的原因，简要概述也要注意性别差异，而不是两者花一样的篇幅去写）
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评价：
1.文章的有些表述还不够确切，缺乏客观性，依据性。
2.论述结构也要注意，两面分析的适用于这一类题目：some people think....but others think....。
discuss both and give oyur opinion；
对于本文的论述结构应该是：文章中大部分篇幅或者全部篇幅来分析你同意或者不同意的一面（一面分析），简要分析或者最后结论部分点出to what extent 即可。
