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Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

The reading material mainly believes that there are problems with painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt. However, in the listening material, the professor corrects the statement by claiming three reasons to oppose the three reasons from the reading respectively.

Firstly, the passage introduces that there is something inconsistent about the way the woman in the portrait is dressed. But the lecturer disagrees with the viewpoint, since the X-ray analysis indicates that the fur collar wasn\'t the orginal part, which was painted after painting finished about 100 years in order to increase the value of the paint so that someone made the woman look like a formal lady.
Secondly, the author proposes that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together. However, the speaker counters that the part of the face was removed so that it seemed to partially in shadow. Meanwhile, the orginal part also can be seen and the light and shadow can fit well.

Thirdly, the writer argues that examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together, while the lecturer disapproves of the oppoion. She shows that several pieces of wood were glued when the fur collar was painted to increase the value of the painting. Besides, researchers also claimed that the tree of the wood was the same as trees which were used to other Rembrandt\'s work.
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The reading material mainly believes that there are problems with painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt. However, in the listening material, the professor corrects the statement by claiming three reasons to oppose the three reasons from the reading respectively.

Firstly, the passage introduces that there is something inconsistent about the way the woman in the portrait is dressed. But the lecturer disagrees with the viewpoint, since the X-ray analysis indicates that the fur collar wasn\'t the orginal[original] part, which was painted after painting finished about 100 years in order to increase the value of the paint so that someone made the woman look like a formal lady.[对立点明确,细节转述到位]

Secondly, the author proposes that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together. However, the speaker counters that the part of the face was removed so that it seemed to partially in shadow. Meanwhile, the orginal[original]part also can be seen and the light and shadow can fit well. [对立点明确,细节转述到位]

Thirdly, the writer argues that examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together, while the lecturer disapproves of the oppoion[opinion]. She shows that several pieces of wood were glued when the fur collar was painted to increase the value of the painting. Besides, researchers also claimed that the tree of the wood was the same as trees which were used to other Rembrandt\'s work. [对立点明确,细节转述到位]

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