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Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

In the lecture, the speaker expresses his opinions on the buzzing, arguing that buzzing is good for consumers and companies and taking against the position made in the reading that buzzing is controversial and it should be banned.

As for the primary defense made in the passage that buzzers usually tell people with incorrect information and mislead them, the speaker casts doubt and asserts that it\\\'s not true. To be specific, companies will only find people who use their products and truly think the products are good to be their buzzers, and companies wouldn\\\'t just pay some buzzers to tell lies about the products.

Moreover, the belief made in the reading that people will listen to buzzers less critically than they should is refuted by the lecture that contends that it\\\'s unlikely that consumers will trust others totally. By extension, most of people who want to buy some products will ask lots of questions, such as the price, the serves and how long have you used this product.

Finally, the lecture puts forward evidence in more contexts, saying that buzzing is good for our relationship with others, while it is put in the reading that buzzing will make people treat others without any trust. According to the lecture, if the products are not good, the company will not hire people as their buzzers. The products recommended by buzzer must be good, so people who trust buzzer can buy good products absolutely, and it will make people keep trustful to the society.

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Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

In the lecture, the speaker expresses his opinions on the buzzing, arguing that buzzing is good for consumers and companies and taking against the position made in the reading that buzzing is controversial and it should be banned. 【首段中将reading和 lecture中的简要观点进行了陈述】

As for the primary defense made in the passage that buzzers usually tell people with incorrect information and mislead them, the speaker casts doubt and asserts that it's not true. To be specific, companies will only find people who use their products and truly think the products are good to be their buzzers, and companies wouldn't just pay some buzzers to tell lies about the products. 【本段的信息点提取准确，表述比较清晰】

Moreover, the belief made in the reading that people will listen to buzzers less critically than they should is refuted by the lecture that contends that it's unlikely that consumers will trust others totally. By extension, most of people who want to buy some products will ask lots of questions, such as the price, the serves and how long have you used this product. 【本段的信息点提取准确, 内容总结完整】

Finally, the lecture puts forward evidence in more contexts, saying that buzzing is good for our relationship with others, while it is put in the reading that buzzing will make people treat others without any trust. According to the lecture, if the products are not good, the company will not hire people as their buzzers. The products recommended by buzzer must be good, so people who trust buzzer can buy good products absolutely, and it will make people keep trustful to the society. 【本段行文结构安排合理】

1.Accuracy:信息抓取比较完整

2.Organization:行文结构安排合理，每一段有reading与lecture的对立内容

3.Language use:用词准确

4. Strength: 内容总结完整，行文结构安排合理