School of Laws
ShangHai XXXXXX XXXXXX, P.R. China
TEL: +86 18XXXXXXXXX
Email: XXXXXXXXXXXX@gmail.com
EDUCATION BACKGROUND
Sep 2009-June 2013 School of Law, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx， Shanghai, China
Major: international politics
Overall GPA: 3.62/4.0 Major GPA: 3.72/4.0
SCHOLORSHIP & HONORS
2009 Shanghai xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, third prize
2010 Shanghai xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, third prize
2010 上海大学生暑假社会实践活动 first prize
2012 Shanghai xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, second prize
钢琴7级 这个本来要写在certification里但没有这一项
STANDARDIZED TEST SCORES
IELTS ( Oct 2012)
6.5(R 7.5; L 6.5; S 5.5; W 5.5)and expected 7 obtained in December, 2012
6.5(R 7.5; L 6.5; S 5.5; W 5.5)and expected 7 obtained in December, 2012
EXTRACURRICULAR ACTIVITIES
July 2012 Eco-Forum Global Volunteer
Provided visitors with information counseling services, to help handle with emergencies
July 2011-Aug 2011 Summer Session Student, Chinese Cuture University, Taipei
Crisis management 95 organizational behavior 85
Nov2011 Shanghai WGC-HSBC CHAMPIONS 2011 Volunteer
Preserve public order
June 2010 上海大学生暑假实践活动
As leader of a team, improved together with teammates
Our team awarded first prize
WORK EXPERIENCE
July 2012-Aug 2012 Intern in Guiyang Branch of Industrial and Commercial Bank of China (ICBC) Ø making mortgage loans, including identifying the risks and doing the loan procedure
11-12年寒暑假周末 贵阳儿童福利院 Taught child English
小站教育综合点评及批改意见：
总的看下来，这份简历给人的感觉就是复杂，但重点不突出，未能凸显专业深度。看似活动很多，但是没有什么主干思想，比较散。建议将这些活动经历进行归类，精简语句。另外就是建议将奖学金那部分的内容往后挪动，与课外活动及实践部分的内容互换位置。最后关于描述儿童福利院的，建议补充更多的内容，比如给孩子们做基础教学，帮助孩子们做心理辅导等等。
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