ESSAY批改——请求教授给邀请信

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　　I am a graduate student of professor Liang at Nanjing University of Technology, China now ,and I graduated from Anhui University of Science and Technology and got my bachelor degree. As a graduate from Nanjing University of Technology, I would like to know if the vacancy of visiting student in your lab is still available.It will be my great honor to be considered as one of your lab members.

　　Your researches are of particular interest to me, especially in sustainable supply chain theory.Though my current research focuses on the evaluation of credit system,I want to learn some new knowledge about the hot subject—sustainable supply chain. Your group’s research is so outstanding that I believe that if given the opportunity to study and research under your guidance, the experience at your lab can improve my research capacity, learn technology that is more new, and enlarge my knowledge in this field, which will benefit me a lot in the future study and job.

　　I want to learn novel knowledge about the field—industrial engineering. However, the condition of the experiments, finances, and personal experiments are restricted,and I have strong study capacity since I have acquired national and school-level scholarship. I would like to find an opportunity to go abroad for further study and research.Could it is possible for you to write a invitation for me ? Thank you so much.

　　The China Scholarship Council(CSC) will provide me with 1200 dollars per month along with a round-trip ticket as financial support for half an year. I plan to go to the U.S. this year in October or November.It will be really appreciated if you could consider my application and give me a invitation letter.

　　Your comments and consideration will be highly appreciated.

　　I am looking forward to hear from you.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Ran Zhang.

　　Here is my resume:

　　1.education:

　　(1)2008.09-2012.06

　　Name of institution: Anhui University of Science and Technology

　　Major: automation

　　Academic Degree: bachelor of engineering

　　(2)2012.06-

　　Name of institution:Nanjing University of Technology

　　Major:systems engineering

　　2.honors:

　　(1)national encouragement scholarship 2009.5

　　(2)national encouragement scholarship 2010.5

　　(3)school-level scholarship 2011.5

　　3.Certificates

　　(1)College English Test 6

　　(2)National computer rank examination certificate grade 2:language C

　　4.Foreign language:

　　Toefl exam :

　　Reading: 28 Listening :23 Speaking :20 Writing :28

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　　I am a graduate student of professor Liang(professor Liang 有多厉害?稍微加个插入语简单介绍下咩) at Nanjing University of Technology, China now (专业或者是研究方向是神马?) ,and I got my bachelor degree at xxxxx university majoring in XXXX. As a graduate from Nanjing University of Technology, I would like to know if the vacancy of visiting student in your lab is still available.It will be my great honor to be considered as one of your lab members.

　　Your researches are of particular interest to me, especially in sustainable supply chain theory.Though my current research focuses on the evaluation of credit system,I want to learn some new knowledge about the hot subject—sustainable supply chain. Your group’s research is so outstanding ，especially in XXXX field, such as XXXXXXX. that I believe that if given the opportunity to study and research under your guidance, the experience at your lab can improve my research capacity, learn technology that is more new, and enlarge my knowledge in this field, which will benefit me a lot in the future study and job.

　　The China Scholarship Council(CSC) will provide me with 1200 dollars per month along with a round-trip ticket as financial support for half an year. I plan to go to the U.S. this year in October or November.加到上面，跟着School level scholarship后面。 It will be really appreciated if you could consider my application and give me a invitation letter.