托福写作教育类话题素材整理：家务对儿童的好处

2017年06月22日16:29 来源：小站整理

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托福写作的备考除了积累词汇以及平时多写写之外，小编认为如果能多积累一些素材也是非常不错的。这里小编为大家整理了一些托福写作的素材，希望可以帮助到大家。下面就跟小编一起来学习一下吧。

托福写作教育类话题之家务对儿童的好处

找出下列句子的一处 语法错误：

According to a study, conducted over a period of twenty years, Prof. Rossman from the University of Minnesota pointed out that children who undertake household chores at ages three to four as less inclined to use drugs and are more likely to maintain a better relationship with his/her family.

♜ 适用考题：

Children should spend most of their time studying and playing; they shouldn’t be required to help the family with household chores, such as cleaning and washing. (2011.3.13)

这里给一位考生的作文，是平时练习的，经过老师的批改，找出了其中的错误，希望大家可以参考一下：

题目：

Children should spend most of their time studying or playing; they shouldn’t be required to help the family with household chores, such as cleaning and washing.

Nowadays, children are required to learn many disciplines such as math, literature, history and physics. So some people claim [改为hence an argument followed hat…]that children should spend most of their time studying those courses and playing to relax, and shouldn’t be required to help the family with household chores. However, I hold an opposite opinion that helping parents to do housework is important as well, since it could enhance the communication between the families and children’s life skills. 这个开头和之前的比起来，比较一般哦]

First of all, doing housework with parents could strengthen family relationship. When children spend time helping family do household chores, they could talk [用share好一些吧，talk有点生硬了]about happy and unhappy things, exchange opinion [复数]and release studying or working stress[这里用refresh]. Family relationship needs time to maintain. [改为it takes years to build sound family …, but it needs to be maintained daily]If family members rarely talk with each other, they won’t know others’ troubles and members will feel cold in the family. For example, in my childhood I often help my mom cook and do laundry. During this time I wouldn’t stop to talk [stop to do是停下来做另一个事，stop doing是停止做某事]about my school life such as having a quarrel with my best friends, getting math teacher’s reward, [建议写为such as a quarrel with…, reward and encouragement from…]while my mom smiled at me and sometimes banter with me. Benefiting from those getting along time, [这里可以说shared time]my mom is my best friend for the decades. On the contrary, one of my classmates was required to spend most time on studying from childhood. After arriving home from school, she came directly in her room to start studying and hardly communicated with parents except[除了可以说independent of] study stuff. Now she studies in a famous University but is reluctant to come home on vocation. Helping parents to clean and wash is vital to enhance family communication. And without enough communication, the family is hardly to be called a home. [感觉你是不是很久没写，写作功底，尤其是表达退化了]

Second, doing housework with parents could cultivate children’s life skill efficiently. Children finally will be a grown man or woman and move out to live on their own, and they need have basic life skill [复数]such as cleaning and washing. If a man is unable to clean, he can’t keep nice suit and if unable to cook, he has to rely on restaurant which is expensive and may not be healthy. For example, when I was in high school in another country, there was no washing machine and I had to wash clothes with hands. Thanks to I had done laundry with my mom from [since] a little child, I handled those clothes well. On the other hand, one of my roommates was not good at washing and her clothes looked dirty even after cleaning, thus she had to pack a suitcase of dirty clothes and took it home every month. I have to say that not good at housework is a disaster when not living [加in]home. Doing household chores with family could cultivate children’s basic life skills and benefit them a lot when growing up.

Admittedly, studying and playing is important, and children should spend much time on them. If a child study not [is not …]so good, in China with a high probability he cannot find 可以用secure]a good job in the future. And because of the heavy study stress children need play and exercise to stay healthy. [这两句可以合起来的]Nevertheless, family communication and basic life skills cannot be ignored no matter how important other things are.

To sum up, it is safe to get the conclusion that helping parents with household chores is also important. Though studying and playing may be able to give children a high salary job and healthy body, family relationship and basic need result from doing housework with families are essential to children’s lives as well.

预估分数：3.5

正如文中所说，感觉你久了没写，有点退化了，首先是篇幅上把握不是很好，之前应该说过，尽量简洁一些，不要拖沓，也不要遵循模板面面俱到，要有自己的风格

表述不够流畅，中式痕迹感觉比之前批的几篇重了点，最近没怎么阅读吗?

以上就是小编为大家整理了托福写作素材，希望对大家在托福写作备考时可以积累起来，写作时可以套用。最后，小编预祝大家托福考试能取得理想的成绩。

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