【实例分析】提分托福独立写作 避免4种开头方式
- 2015年04月22日10:20 来源：小站整理
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想要写出一篇托福的高分作文，最为重要的当然是一个精彩的文章开头。对于托福作文来说，很多初入托福的学生认为是不是需要引入一些比较高深的名人名言，才是博得高分的基础。其实，事实也并非如此，在托福开头中，开门见山直奔主题才是关键。下面我们就为大家介绍一下，托福写作开头中应该避免的四项关键问题。
1、废话连篇急煞读者
失败案例：
Topic --Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting. I am very interested in talking about this topic. Because I am also a college student and I am not married……
修改方案：开门见山 直奔主题
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。
2、观点不明态度暧昧
失败案例：
Topic--Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
3、渐行渐远 离题千里
失败案例：
Topic---It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。
4、中式英语人见人跪
失败案例：
Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chop when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a person always does bad things, he will get “baoying”。
