托福独立口语Task1 官方真题Official18真题答案评析（原TPO）
- 2017年03月22日18:31 来源：小站教育作者：小站教研中心
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这里小编为大家带来了官方真题Official18的托福口语Task1的低分答案与高分答案，大家可以比较一下这两篇答案的差距在哪里。大家一起来看看吧。
题目：
Imagine your life ten years in the future. Talk about one way you think your life will be different in ten years than it is now.
低分答案：
Personally speaking, one aspect I can ❶ come up that will change in the next decade is that our eating habits might ❷ be different from our current ones. This is partly because that we ❸ now expose too much to a variety of foods containing overused pesticides and dangerous chemicals, and our health is ❹ dangerous. Accordingly, much attention is paid to what we eat and the way we eat. In addition, modern educated people ❺ have more health-related knowledge and they are increasingly aware of the importance of a balanced and healthy diet. ❻ As a result of this healthy trend, I can pretty much predict that less than ten years people will be served more nutritious dishes in restaurants and foods will be cooked more properly.
解析：
General Description (总体陈述印象):
考生具有一定的信息组织能力，并能够多角度回答问题，但总体信息组织松散，语汇表达单一不明确，语法存在错误，发音带有明显的中式口音。
Topic Development (话题发展): 该答案采用金字塔结构，对个人在未来十年后的改变进行多角度描述，指出饮食习惯会与现在的不同，从改变的原因(why)展开叙述，此处原因中举例提到过度使用杀虫剂和危险化学品，之后提到现代受教育的人们(who)更重视健康知识。但是，总体而言每个出发点的信息较为发散不集中，信息衔接时逻辑连贯性不强。
Language Use (语言运用): ❶语法错误：正确短语应该是come up with;❷句式简单：be different from短语用法过于简单;❸搭配错误：短语搭配错误，应该为be exposed to;❹单词理解错误：dangerous含义是指会给别人带来危险的;❺句式过于简单：and they are中的they指的是前面出现的people;❻表达生硬 ：As a result，作为引导句型的过渡词出现，不用As a result of 。
Delivery (语言表达): 学生的整体回答缺少语调的变化，句与句以及词与词之间缺少有效停顿。该学生在发音方面出现了较多处错误，也没有注意发音时的问题，如连读health-related，a result of等。
高分答案：
Well actually I guess maybe ten years later, I will start a family that ❶ differentiates from the present days in two aspects. First of all, I will ❷ shoulder the responsibility to raise my family. Thus I will be a real man who definitely needs to work genuinely hard ❸ so that I can earn enough money to support my family ❹ instead of just being a student in the university living on allowance from parents. It is also necessary for me to take good care of my family members especially my wife and children. ❺ For example, I need to handle ❻ daily trivia like changing diapers or feeding milk to my little babies and things like that.
解析：
General Description (总体陈述印象):
考生的发音较好，咬字清楚，回答中逻辑很有连贯性，语汇表达多样灵活，句式丰富且信息完整。
Topic Development (话题发展):该答案采用典型的平行结构，thesis statement是从两方面来描述十年后的自己会成家立业，一方面是提到自己将会承担责任，第二方面提到自己需要尽力照顾好妻子和孩子。细节处理上，so that I can, …一句用了解释的手法论证shoulder the responsibility. For example同样运用了举例的手法。考生在回答时，运用so that …; instead of 等连词，It is also necessary for …的句式，使整个答案层次更加分明。
Language Use (语言运用): ❶在表达中利用differentiates from，没有用常见的be different from, 体现语汇多样性。❷中活用固定搭配shoulder the responsibility，且用动词raise描述family，使得整个句子信息完整，用词恰当。❸中so that连接了下面的解释论证内容，有效的将句子扩充。❹中的instead of关联性强，强调了对比信息。❺For example进行举例，补充第二方面的观点。❻中daily trivia替换了常用daily chores，语汇丰富。
Delivery (语言表达): 此学生的回答连贯性和语言的流畅性较好，很多词组的发音均有很好的发音习惯，如连读instead of，take good care等;如卷舌differentiates from，responsibility to raise等。回答中，考生的语速均等，并且句与句、词与词之间有明显停顿，让考官听得很清楚。
通过上面两上答案的对比，小站老师给了解析，为什么给出高分或者低分，相信大家一比较也会看出来。希望对大家自己练习口语时可以参考一下。最后，小编预祝大家托福考试能取得理想的成绩。
