这4大托福写作雷区，70%考生都踩过！写作冲25分的最大阻碍竟是…

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摘要：这4大托福写作雷区，70%考生都踩过！写作冲25分的最大阻碍竟是…

托福写作有多 “坑”？

见过太多孩子，托福总分明明够冲刺 TOP30，却栽在写作单科 ——

看似基础的开头结尾、词汇语法、结构逻辑，偏偏成了高频丢分点！

据小站内部数据统计，超 70% 考生在首尾段冗余、词汇堆砌这类简单题上栽过跟头，甚至有学生因写作拖后腿，与梦校 offer 擦肩而过…

对大多数托福考生而言，搞清楚托福写作的 “丢分规则”，就像拿到 “避坑宝典”，能精准找对答题方向。

托福官方《OG》揭秘写作评分雷区，成绩不理想可能因踩了这些易忽略的坑。

今天就扒开托福评分老师最反感的 4 大写作陷阱，家长快带孩子自查避坑?

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1
冗长累赘的首尾段

不少学生为凑字数，死记硬背或照搬现成句子，想让评分老师眼前一亮。但实际上，评分老师超反感冗长啰嗦、华而不实的首尾段落。

看个反面案例：

The importance of the issue raised by the posed statement, namely creating a new holiday for people, cannot be underestimated, as it concerns the very fabric of society. As it stands, the issue of creating a new holiday raises profound implications for the future. However, although the subject matter in general cannot be dismissed lightheartedly, the perspective of the issue as presented by the statement raises certain qualms regarding practical application.

In conclusion, although I have to accept that it is imperative that something be done about creating a new holiday for people and find the underlying thrust of the implied proposal utterly convincing, I cannot help but feel wary of taking such irrevocable steps and personally feel that a more measured approach would be more rewarding.

2
一味堆砌词汇

除了反感冗长首尾段，评分人也不待见堆砌华丽辞藻，却没围绕论点深入阐述的写法。

反面案例感受下：

At the heart of any discussion regarding an issue pertaining to creating a new holiday, it has to be borne in mind that a delicate line has to be trod when dealing with such matters. The human resources involved in such matters cannot be guaranteed regardless of all the good intentions that may be lavished. While it is true that creating a new holiday might be a viable and laudable remedy, it is transparently clear that applied wrongly such a course of action could be calamitous and compound the problem rather than provide a solution.

要是作文只靠堆砌单词叙述，哪怕篇幅 300 - 400 词、没语法错误，内容也会空洞无物。这类作文在考官眼里，最多拿 1 - 2 分（满分 5 分）。

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结构不清晰

评分者超关注作文结构！结构缜密、条理清晰的作文，读者能顺顺当当读完；结构混乱的，读者会看得一头雾水。

小站托福教研组专属建议

托福写作需分段，得用有效过渡手法帮读者跟上思路。但只靠 first、second这类简单连接词，可没法保证结构严谨、行文流畅。还得让所有观点紧扣主题、围绕中心。

看篇低分作文：

Recently, there is a big debate on the issue that telling the truth or not is the most important consideration in the relationship between people. For my experience, I think telling a truth is the most important consideration in people's relationship. In the following, I will illustrate my opinion by two reasons.

First of all, honest make the trust stronger between friends or colleages. As we know, if people tell a lie to others he will not be trusted, When he tell a truth, others will believe that he tells a lie. For example, a person who is honest to others, can get real help and get trust of others.

Secondly, telling a lie always makes things worse not only in work but also in family life. When somebody do something wrong in his job he should annouce his mistake to his manager. If he don't do that others may continue their jobs base on the mistake. Consequently, the work will be worse and worse.

On the contrary, sometimes it is better to tell a lie to others, such as telling a lie to a patient. As we know, the sick become worse when a cancer patient know his illness. A good way to protect their life is to tell a lie. So that many doctors will not tell the truth to a dying patient.

To sum up, people should tell the truth to maintain their relationship with other people, although sometimes people have to tell a lie. People can get trust when they are honest to others.

这篇作文篇幅长、例子多，可观点各自为政，关联松散，读者读着 confusion 拉满。

想拿高分，得保证文章统一性、渐进性、连贯性（评分标准重点），让读者轻松跟上思路。

建议多研读高分范文，积累实用过渡词汇。

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