托福独立写作高分开头段写法实例讲解这4种实用提分写法学起来

2021年06月04日09:54 来源：小站教育作者：小站托福编辑: 参与（0）阅读（2452）

摘要：万事开头难，这点放到托福考试的写作中也是一样的。拿到作文真题想好了提纲却不知道如何展开的情况在考生中是比较常见的。很多同学也比较缺乏一些作文开头段写作经验的积累。本文将实例分析4种比较理想的托福独立写作开头段写法。(搜“小站托福”公众号，回复关键词“资讯”，掌握托福最新的考试资讯及留学信息。)

一篇托福独立写作的开头段对整体评分影响很大。常有同学中间段论述写得不错，但开头太过平淡普通，结果没能拿到理想成绩，这种情况狂就很可惜。考生如何才能写好托福独立写作开头段？下面小编就来实例介绍3种比较理想的托福独立写作开头段写法。

托福独立写作开头段高分写法：开门见山

题目：

Businesses are as likely as are governments to establish large bureaucracies, but bureaucracy is far more damaging to a business than it is to a government.

模板：

Contrary to the statement’s premise, my view is that businesses are less likely than government to establish large bureaucracies, because businesses know that they are more vulnerable than government to damage resulting from bureaucratic inefficiencies. My position is well supported by common sense and by observation.

点评：

开门见山式的开头段写法其实是比较标准的一种写法，因为托福的独立写作从题目要求来说本质上就是一篇议论文，而且还是立论文，需要考生自己提出观点然后论述证明。那么在开头段就直接鲜明地亮出观点无疑是很合理的写法，对考官来说也能第一时间就看到你的观点，可以说是对读者比较友好的一种写法。比如上面的这个模板，就是第一句话直接写出了自己对题目的反对立场，并且最后给出了引出下面正式论述的引导句。这种开头段写法虽然不玩花样看似有点平淡甚至BORING，但对于不要求太多文笔更看重论述逻辑的议论文来说确实是比较高效的写法，也很适合新手考生进行模仿学习。

托福独立写作开头段高分写法：引用谚语名言

题目：

“As technologies and the demand for certain services change, many workers will lose their jobs. The responsibility for those people to adjust to such change should belong to the individual worker, not to government or to business.

模板：

As a saying goes, “God helps those help themselves”, which is true in most cases. But as far as the large numbers of laid-off workers caused by the technological and market changes are concerned, I believe the government and the business certainly have an unshakable responsibility to take.

点评：

这种写法就比较有创意了，当然大家在写中文作文时肯定也用过，就是开头就先引用个名人名言压一下场面，比如某某曾经说过。。。这样的写法。这种写法对考生的英语积累有一定要求，引用的谚语或者名言既要符合题目场景切题，考生也需要完整记住这句名言而不能自行修改甚至凭空捏造，无论是强行凑名言还是伪造的做法都只会让结果适得其反。当然这种写法能够一定程度上展现出考生的英语素养和积累，可以说是一种比较炫技的写法，大家如果在英语的言语名言方面有不错的积累可以考虑一下这种写法。

托福独立写作开头段高分写法：先复述再引出观点

题目：

"We shape our buildings and afterwards our buildings shape us.”

模板：

I believe this statement should be interpreted broadly—to mean that we are influenced by the exterior shape of buildings, as well as by the arrangement of multiple buildings and by a building’s various architectural and aesthetic elements. While I doubt that buildings determine our character or basic personality traits, I agree that they can greatly influence our attitudes, moods, and even life styles.

点评：

这种写法比起直接开门见山亮观点的写法来说可能更加稳妥一些，毕竟先简单复述题目再表达自己观点是托福官方指南OG中比较推荐的开头写法。而且无论考生对题目观点是否赞同，对题目复述之后进行适当的让步再亮出观点也是一种比较委婉的表述方式。当然这种写法需要注意不能引用太多原题，而且不能照搬需要用自己的话来适当改动一下。这其中的度大家需要把握好，否则反而会引起一些不必要的扣分。

托福独立写作开头段高分写法：自问自答表明立场

题目：

"As technologies and the demand for certain services change, many workers will lose their jobs. The responsibility for those people to adjust to such change should belong to the individual worker, not to government or to business.”

模板：

As technology and changing social needs render more and more jobs obsolete, who is responsible for helping displaced workers adjust? While individuals have primary responsibility for learning new skills and finding work, both industry and government have some obligation to provide them the means of doing so.

点评：

自问自答式的开头段写法在托福考试官方给出的范文类资料中是比较少见的。这种设问写法的作用也很明显，通过汇总其实也就是变相复述一下原题目，对其中比较尖锐的矛盾问题直接以提问的形式来引出之后自己的看法。这种写法其实是比较挑题目的，如果作文原题是那种有明显对立互斥观点，或者要求考生二选一的题目，那么用这种写法就比较适合了。而对于一些只要求考生给出自己的观点比较平淡一些的题目，这种写法可能就会给人强行挑事的感觉了。因此大家学习这种开头模板写法需要注意根据题目来选择使用。