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独立写作范文解析:现在的年轻人更愿意花时间改变世界(2013.3.3)

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摘要:托福独立写作在整个考试中的重要性自然是不言而喻的,那么在考试的过程中,我们应该掌握的技巧和方法有哪些呢?到底该怎样组织文章呢?今天小编就为大家带来独立写作范文解析!

Do you agree or disagree:Young people today are more likely to give time and effort to improve the world than young people were in the past.

【译文】你是否同意:比起以前的年轻人,现在的年轻人比过去的年轻人愿意花时间和精力去改善这个世界。

【解析】在托福独立写作考试中,考生应该学会审题,如果考生在审题中出现失误的话,就算考生的论述再清晰,也不会取得高分的。根据以往的独立写作的题目,前程百利小编认为,可以把独立写作中的题型分为观点选择类,比较对比类。建议考生在看到题目的时候,首先把题目通读1-3遍,着重看在题目中的名词和动词,如果题目中给出了两个观点或者是一个观点的两个方面,要求考生进行比较论述并给出个人的观点,那就是观点选择类的题目,比如在今天分享的考题:agree or disagree with the following statement就是观点选择题;如果要求考生根据两个对立的观点做出选择就是比较对比类型的题,比如在TPO11中了,让考生在针对人们关于电脑的两个不同的认知中进行选择就是这类题目。


Though they can perhaps be faulted for their hubris and naiveté, young people are valuable wellsprings of ambition and hope.  Where time may have rendered older generations impotent through dejection and cynicism, youths become especially important to the betterment of the world.  It has often been said that the world's youths are its primary engines of change, and I think at no point in history has this been truer than it is today. Young people today are more willing than ever to try and improve this planet we call home.

【译文】尽管年轻人可能会因为傲慢和天真而被指责,但他们是有价值的、有抱负和希望的源泉。或许时间会使老一辈人因沮丧和玩世不恭而变得无能为力时,年轻人对世界的改善尤为重要。人们常说,世界上的年轻人是变革的主要动力,我认为历史上没有任何意义比今天更真实。今天的年轻人比以往任何时候都更愿意尝试改善这个我们称之为家的星球。

【解析】在这类观点选择题中,考生直接选择其中的一个观点写就可以了,一定要注意不要将在题目中出现的不同的观点进行对比,在表明自己观点的基础上,考生可以选择三个方面进行论证,这些论点之间可以是层层递进的关系,也可以说平行关系,最后再总述论点即可。


The first reason for this is simply a greater sense of global awareness.  With the advent of prompt and wide-reaching information distribution networks like radio, TV, and especially the Internet, everyone knows more about the state of the world than what was previously possible.  Just the larger absolute number of people made aware of various circumstances, from wars to disasters to grievous social injustices, is enough to increase the absolute number of youths mobilized to action.

【译文】第一个原因是现在的年轻人更具有全球意识。随着像收音机、电视、尤其是互联网这样的迅速而广泛的信息传播网络的出现,每个人都比以前更了解世界的现状。从战争到灾难再到严重的社会不公正,只有当更多的人意识到这些现状,才会有更多年轻人被动员起来采取行动。

【解析】在确定题目类型之后,考生就应该进行谋篇布局了。在确定论点先后顺序的时候应该慎重,要有逻辑性的安排这些论点。比如考生可以按照这些论点的重要性进行排列,把最能表达自己观点的部分放在首位,把最不能表达自己观点的内容放在最后一个自然段进行论述;或者考生在安排论点的时候可以按照范围的大小来进行排列,总之一定要有逻辑。


The second reason for more young people are getting involved today is our growing sense of social justice and social responsibility due to a greater intellectual enlightenment. Altruism is a rational response rather than a purely emotional one; the growth of human knowledge and rationality has steadily emboldened youths to pursue philanthropic courses of action.  We are smarter than we were in the past-this allows us to look more easily past false dichotomies of us versus them, or indefensible prejudices arising from fear or selfishness.  Over time it has become clearer that there is only us, and that we are all responsible for our collective wellbeing.  This overarching shift in consciousness not only encompasses young people, but is driven by them.

【译文】如今,更多的年轻人愿意改变世界的第二个原因是,由于更大范围的知识启蒙,我们越来越意识到社会正义和社会责任。利他主义是一种理性的反应,而不是纯粹的情感反应;人类知识和理性的增长,使年轻人更加大胆地追求慈善事业。我们比过去更聪明——这让我们更容易地看到我们与他们之间的是非观,或者是由于恐惧或自私而产生的无法防御的偏见。随着时间的推移,我们变得更加清楚,恰恰是我们自己要对我们的集体幸福负责。这种意识的全面转变不仅包括年轻人,更是由他们推动的这种转变。

【解析】第二分论点,层层递进,进一步说明为什么现在会有更多的年轻人愿意花时间和精力来改变世界。


Finally, young people today are more independent and have a greater ability to effect change than ever before. For proof of greater independence, we need only examine how young people in almost all societies have become increasingly willing to break from tradition, disobey authority figures, and transgress established modes of thought-the increasing regularity of political protests worldwide is one indicator of this out of many.  This greater independence is important, because it encourages young people to break from ossified, established channels of inquiry and change as means of improving the world.  For proof of greater ability to effect change, we need only look at the abundance of new organizations, websites, projects, missions, and tools created and spearheaded by young people today: Micro-financing websites like Kiva, which would have been inconceivable even 30 years ago; The Secret Society for Creative Philanthropy, which, in a creative twist, gives $100 grants to those who conceive of novel ways to use that $100 to help others.

【译文】最后,今天的年轻人比以往任何时候都更独立,更有能力进行改变。为了证明更大的独立性,我们只需要研究几乎所有社会中的年轻人都越来越愿意打破传统,不服从权威,违背既定的思维模式——世界范围内政治抗议活动的不断增加是这方面的一个指标。这种更大的独立性是很重要的,因为它鼓励年轻人脱离僵化的、建立的调查渠道和改变世界的方式。为了证明更有能力改变现状,我们只需要看看今天由年轻人创建和引领的新组织、网站、项目、任务和工具的丰富程度:像Kiva这样的微型融资网站,即使在30年前也是不可想象的;创意慈善的秘密协会,在一个创造性的转折中,向那些想出了用这100美元来帮助他人的新奇方法的人提供了100美元的资助。

【解析】本文采用经典的五段式的方式表达自己的观点,文章结构完整,三个分论点充分展示了作者语言的丰富性,逻辑的严谨性。


Young people today are more socially aware, feel more socially responsible, and have greater drive and means to effect change than ever before. It thus stands to reason that they are more likely to spend time and effort improving the world than young people in the past.

【译文】今天的年轻人更有社会意识,更有社会责任感,比以往任何时候都有更大的动力和手段去改变。因此,他们更有可能花时间和精力来改善世界,而不是过去的年轻人。

【解析】总结段,概述上文分论点,重申自己的观点。首尾呼应,结构完整。


以上是今日分享的生活类型独立作文范文《Young people today are more likely to give time and effort to improve the world than young people were in the past.》,祝大家文思泉涌,妙笔生花,破题如竹。


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