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【小站名师】托福写作中期备考之独立写作三部曲

2016年07月18日11:06 来源:小站教育作者:小站教育Cindy老师
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摘要:在托福写作考试中,考生想要写出一篇高分作文,那么你的托福作文中就需要规避一些小瑕疵。今天小编就为大家带来托福写作中期备考之独立写作三部曲,希望对大家托福写作提升有帮助。

同样对于中期备考的同学来说,独立作文的高分范文赏析也是每天一篇的节奏,必备的工具就是一支笔,一个笔记本,看过的独立范文一定不能合上就如过眼云烟,那如何高效赏析提高写作水平呢,往下看:

【小站名师】托福写作中期备考之独立写作三部曲图1

1. 定位主旨,掌握大意

拿到一篇范文时,首先审题,审完题之后在笔记本上记录该题所属的话题比如教育类,环境类,政府类,生活类等等。接着通读全文,可以使用综合写作阅读材料主要内容提取的技巧快速定位出整篇文章的主旨大意,例如总论点一定在首段的尾句,三个分论点在主体段的段首或者段尾,剥离出来的这四句可以迅速简记在笔记本上,作为这类话题作文的写作素材。比如下面2013.9.8独立作文的范文:

A or DA: Governments should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development.

The past several decades have witnessed that the world’s economy is booming. Modern skyscrapers, convenient communications, fast transportations make it easier and cozier for people to live in this planet. However, people are beginning to realize that the great achievements today seem to be at the price of destroying the nature. They claim that governments should focus its budgets more on environment than on economic development. As for me, I am a big fan of environmental protection and I am wholeheartedly in agreement with this claim. Here are some reasons and examples to support my view.

开头:同意政府应该把财政预算更多地放在环保上

First, the environmental protection is closely bound up with the health of every single person in this world. If the environment is polluted, the basic elements people need to survive must be affected, and thus disastrous results may occur. Recently I have read an appalling fact from newspapers that there is a village in the center of China where the majority of its residents, including kids and seniors, suffer from cancer such as lung cancer, stomach cancer and lymph cancer. The investigators found that the villagers’ drinking water is from a river that is severely contaminated by the industrial discharges of enterprises located at the upstream.

主体段 1:环境保护与每个人的健康息息相关

In addition, the environmental protection is conducive to the sustainability of economic development. There are some idioms in China, “killing the hens for the egg”, “draining the pond for the fish”, and “burning the woods for the prey”. These ancient wisdoms warn modern people not to gain profits at present without thinking of the future. In other words, we cannot simply satisfy the need of contemporary people regardless of the interest of our next generation. Imagine that if we were in excessive pursuit of economic development by consuming all the natural resources, hunting for precious animals mercilessly and cutting down forests, what will become of our descendants?

主体段 2:环境保护能保证经济的可持续发展

Last but not least, the environmental protection can boost the development of economy at the same time. For instance, a country that emphasizes on its environment must be a country famous for its sightseeing industry. I have been to Singapore in which I am not only amazed by its prosperous economy but also by its garden-like environment. The lawns, the trees, the rivers are beautifully designed to fit into the city. This case well illustrates that the economic development and environmental protection sometimes construct no conflicts between each other.

主体段 3:环境保护可以同时刺激经济的发展,比如发展观光旅游业。

To put it in a nutshell, governments should put its budgets on environmental protection than on economic development. In the process of achieving more prosperous economy, people should sometimes stop to think about whether the world we live could provide fresh air, clean water and healthy food, for these are fundamentally vital to the fate of human beings.

【小站名师】托福写作中期备考之独立写作三部曲图2

2. 理清逻辑,分析技巧

赏析赏析,“析”是很重要的一个环节,就范文的一个段落,我们如何分析呢,以上文来举个例子:

开头段

S1The past several decades have witnessed that the world’s economy is booming. S2Modern skyscrapers, convenient communications, fast transportations make it easier and cozier for people to live in this planet. S3However, people are beginning to realize that the great achievements today seem to be at the price of destroying the nature. S4They claim that governments should focus its budgets more on environment than on economic development. S5As for me, I am a big fan of environmental protection and I am wholeheartedly in agreement with this claim. S6Here are some reasons and examples to support my view.

六句话读完后我们可以分析它的写作步骤其实是:S1S2S3背景添加——S4话题引入——S5己方立场表明——S6过渡句,承上启下

主体段

S1First, the environmental protection is closely bound up with the health of every single person in this world. S2If the environment is polluted, the basic elements people need to survive must be affected, and thus disastrous results may occur. S3Recently I have read an appalling fact from newspapers that there is a village in the center of China where the majority of its residents, including kids and seniors, suffer from cancer such as lung cancer, stomach cancer and lymph cancer. S4The investigators found that the villagers’ drinking water is from a river that is severely contaminated by the industrial discharges of enterprises located at the upstream.

这一段的写作步骤是:S1主题句——S2说理论证——S3S4具体的例子

由此可看出本段对第一个论点的论证技巧是:说理+举例论证

每一个段落这样分析后,能够理清范文的内容逻辑,并且可以积累相关的例证(有必要记在笔记本上,写作中遇到类似话题时主动模仿用起来!!!)

3. 遣词造句,套用练习

高分范文另一大宝贝珍贵之处就在于内含一些华丽精彩的词句,很多同学平时也知道去记录,但记完后就束之高阁了,实则不然,始终要记住你摘录的句子是人家的,那如何变成自己拿高分的利器呢?例如,还是上面那篇范文,cindy老师通过整理,全篇精彩的词句如下:

···make it easier and cozier for people to do sth ···使人们更舒适做某事

at the price of doing sth 以·····为代价

a big fan of sth 强烈支持···

be closely bound up with sth 与···密切相关

industrial discharges of enterprises 企业的工业废水

be conducive to··· 有利于···促进···

killing the hens for the egg 杀鸡取卵

draining the pond for the fish 竭泽而渔

burning the woods for the prey 焚林而猎

satisfy the need of··· 满足···的需求

be in excessive pursuit of··· 过度追求···

boost 刺激,促进

fit into··· 适合···(空间);与···融为一体

to put it in a nutshell 总而言之,一言以蔽之

be vital to··· 对···极其重要,关键

摘录词句的小技巧在于多记一些词组,固定搭配,接下来在自己的写作中一定要想方设法套用进去!反复套用,才能变成自己的辞藻。切记: 不认识的单词,词组一定要去词典中查清楚它的用法!

总而言之,无论是综合写作范文的二重奏还是独立写作范文的三部曲,”赏““析”缺一不可,眼,脑,手并用赏析之后,我们一定要从范文中学会或搬出一些有用的东西,真正提高自己的写作水平,一举拿下理想分数!

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