Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the computer technology is so advanced thatthe Internet and computer can replace their function. To what extent do youagree or disagree?
学生原文：
In contemporary society, there exists a dramatic debate about whether or not to open a public library for citizens when not only the online stores but also E-libraries come out. As for me, even it is convenient for us to search for information, however, computers can not replace traditional libraries.
First of all, super computers nowadays do a mass of unexpected tasks, which could store books from all over the world. Its storage capacity is so large that in can save domestic space. In addition, the practical experience has prove that we could find all our need of contents of libraries by using our laptop. What a progressive advance in our human beings.
On the contrary, the "new libraries" has limited power in comparison with traditional libraries. The first weakness is that despite the miracle of computer technology, it still exists much drawbacks. In many cities or universities, scholars and students regard the buiding of library as a symbol, which can not be displaced. Therefore, it remains much more wonderful libraries since the first professional college was built as to sixteen century. Unfortunately, there are some cases concerned that forcing everyone to switch the habit of reading from using paper to electric screen might destroy a large number of elder reader. Meanwhile, restriction of peering on computer or tablet PC is good way to protect people from eyesight fallen down. In addition, how to prevent the copyright of every book is a focus issue today as well, because of plagiarism surrounded.
In my personal view, it is our responsibility to develop high technology today. At the same time, the public libraries mustn't be replaced, and also i acknowledge that they will co-exist in harmony in the future.
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In contemporary society, there exists a dramatic debate about whether or not to open a public library for citizens when not only the online stores but also E-libraries come out. 【改写题目】As for me, even it is convenient for us to search for information, however, computers can not replace traditional libraries.【自己的观点】
第一段我们一般按照三个层次来展开：背景介绍——改写题目——自己的观点。这样的写法会使第一段比较的充实，内容丰富。你缺少了第一个层次，注意一下。
First of all, super computers nowadays do a mass of unexpected tasks, which could store books from all over the world. Its 【你的前一句是super computers,为了一致，这里用their更好】storage capacity is so large that in 【同样，这边应该用they】can save domestic space. In addition, the practical experience has prove that we could find all our need of contents of libraries by using our laptop. What a progressive advance in our human beings.【这句话没有主语，可以说What a progressive advance they bring about in our human beings】
On the contrary, the "new libraries" has limited power in comparison with traditional libraries. The first weakness is that despite the miracle of computer technology, it still exists much (many)drawbacks.【这里面应该这样安排，第一个weakness是它有哪一方面的不足，下面再说其他的 不足是什么】 In many cities or universities, scholars and students regard the buiding of library as a symbol, which can not be displaced. Therefore, it remains much more wonderful libraries since the first professional college was built as to sixteen century. Unfortunately, there are some cases concerned (concerning)that forcing everyone to switch the habit of reading from using paper to electric screen might destroy a large number of elder reader. Meanwhile, restriction of peering on computer or tablet PC is good way to protect people from eyesight fallen (falling)down. In addition, how to prevent the copyright of every book is a focus issue today as well, because of plagiarism surrounded.【出现了The first这样的字眼，那你的The second/another的呢？】
In my personal view, it is our responsibility to develop high technology today. At the same time, the public libraries mustn't 【表示禁止，应该用cannot】be replaced, and also i acknowledge that they will co-exist in harmony in the future.
估分：5.5-6
评价：这篇文章最大的问题就是段落的结构不够严谨紧密，每一段的中心句一定要斟酌，不是随便写的，不可以出现中心句的内容在下文中没有得到体现这种情况。
